Now usually an MP3 is generally pretty satisfying in quality, but this song lost a lot of it's quality when you converted it into an MP3, I'd definitely reccomend to anybody who wants to hear it at it's best, to go check out the soundcloud WAV. I happen to be a sound engineer, which means I got quite a bit of experience in editing and such, so if you want some help converting it without so much quality loss, then drop me a message and I'll help you.
No onto the review which I'm gonna attack piece by piece (I'm actually reviewing based upon the soundcloud version, so I'm not gonna bitch about the quality).
First off, as a lyricist you definitely got potential. There was good flow, structure and timing in your lyrics, it all rhymed except for a few near rhymes here and there which was pretty cool. The only real problem is that you did use a lot of safe words (words easy to rhyme) and not many complex ones, if you're planning on doing more rap, then you might want to look into adding some complex rhymes, some double word rhymes, some offbeat rhymes .etc Like all good rappers do, to keep the rhymes original. The lyrical content was good, you didn't overdo it, you get a lot of songs which are so full of cussing and random psycho blabber that it takes away from the song and it becomes childish. That didn't happen here, so props on getting that balance.
Next, I'm gonna talk about the actual rapping. You got that rhyme, you got that flow, you got a pretty good voice, I'm not sure if you put enough emotion into it though. With most general rap songs, there tends to be a lot of heavily felt emotion in it, just little things you notice, like slight changes in the voice, making them sound angrier or happier, putting emphasis on certain words. You could have changed up the style at different section for a bigger impact too. That doesn't really take away from it though, you had a good flow and you were actually rapping, which beats most rappers these days who have no sense of rhythm and are basically just talking. So the rapping was pretty awesome too, fucking dope flow to it by the way.
Now on to the music itself, it did suit it real nicely, it did have a lot of emotion in it, it was good to rap over, it flowed nice and it was very well made. Here's my only actual problem with it, the same loop is playing throughout the entire song with no break and honestly it's just not a catchy enough tune for it to work well, it would have been nice to hear some difference sections or perhaps a chorus. It's nothing that majorly bugs me, it's just it feels like there's a little something missing, you could have changed it up just a little bit. Other than that, it's pretty damn awesome.
Now you got to the actual subject, I can relate strongly in many ways, it's just I can't take the subject of haters gonna hate too seriously in many ways. Some parts were like a headtrip to listen to, hearing stuff I've heard come out of my own mouth and run through my own mind, but then at certain points it was just like "Really...?" fortunately these moments were scarce and didn't come close to spoiling it for me. If you had sung it without things like "All the do is hate." I could have gotten into this a lot more and related to it better. Not so much a flaw so much as a personal pet peave, I've always found myself being a little annoyed about people all like "Haters gonna hate, so fuck you" which just brings to mind childish phrases like "I am rubber you are glue, blah blah blah".
The subject was obviously about people who thought they were getting at you, picking on you, trying to make your life harder and you obviously rose above it and powered on through, not letting anything get to you. Along with little parasitic shits sucking off of you like leeches, which I can relate to massively (I also share that big old loyalty issue) so in that sense you picked a great subject and for many that kind of subject can be relevant and often for some people quite inspiring. So in that area, fantastic job man, really hit the nail on the head on a lot of things.
The production values of the song are absolutely fantastic by the way, it was obvious you had spent a good amount of time working on it and put a fair bit of effort into making each little bit as good as you possibly can. That's kind of rare among up and coming rappers, who tend to produce clunky ill-concieved tracks, which would have been good if they had just put a little more time and effort into it. It was well thought out and it payed off well, the mastering was pretty good (Not sure if this was intentional or not) but the levels and the output were perfect, the mixing between the vocals and the music was great, the vocals mixed with the audio very well, in a lot of songs one can overpower the other, so well done for that.
All in all, it was a very enjoyable track with a relatable theme and a great deal of effort put into it. The lyrics were great, the audio was good, the subject was fantastic and you really pulled through on the vocals. I have checked out some of your sound cloud stuff and you're a musician with a great deal of potential and I look forward to seeing what you come up with in future. 4.5/5
I'm gonna attack this step by step mentioning what I like and what could be improved.
I've got to say straight off the bat, I am digging this track. It's very proffesional, the quality is immense and it's very upbeat, play this out on the go and I could totally get down to this. Overall I'm pretty blown away by the production values of this track, it has so much going for it I'm dissapointed it didn't get much exposure. It's quite innovative so far as dance music goes and I'm loving the style which I have to congratulate you on, the style is by far the most redeeming aspect.
As I say I love the style, it has a lot of dance and trance elements which are pretty cool, I love the oriental-esque sounds, it does have a nice Japanese string texture to it which pays off quite well when combined with the synths. It was pretty cool how many transitions and sections you were able to cram into one track, you had enough variety in their to keep it interesting but not so much that it sounded cluttered, ultimately you never lingered on one section long enough for me to become bored with it. The transitions between the different sections where also pretty great, the flow this song has is very smooth.
I will say however, the main riff you used throughout most of the song was perhaps a little overused, you could have perhaps changed it up but frankly you did a good job on it and hell, it's pleasant to hear. The effects helped stir it up a lot, so it did turn out real nice. Gotta hand it to you, you know what you're doing. There's a very good atmosphere to this, which is rare in a lot of dance submissions, there's a lot of texture and ambience which help make it sound a lot more full and a lot more pleasant.
The soundscapes you used are like pornography for my ears. :)
At first I was kinda "eh..." about the opening, the first 15 seconds sounded like it had been composed on a chamberlin or some early analogue drum machine. The drums are the only thing I was a little dissapointed with, they don't really have much presence and they sound a lot like the Fruity Loops default kit which is quite bland. I would have loved to hear some nice tight snares and some hard hitting claps. They just don't have the energy the rest of the song has, they suffer from one problem and one problem only, they're too simple, which in some songs is good but in this it just seemed a little bland.
I like to add, that whilst it has an obvious Japanese theme, so far as Japanese dance and pop goes it isn't particularly similar (based upon my limited knowledge of that genre), it does maintain that style of being Japanese though since it's basically what most people outside of Japan would imagine their music to be like. I'm not sure if this was intentional or not, were you trying to innovate upon that style? I did take a quick look at your other music, listening to "Love In Tokyo" and "Break Up In Tokyo" which seemed closer stylistically.
The style isn't lost though because of the synth choice, that oriental-esque theme to it. Honestly you still aimed for what you were trying to achieve, so good job on that one.
I'm going to finish by saying the synths are absolutely massive and what's a dance song without some epic synths? The song radiates pure joy, it's simply fabulous, when the moment they kicked in I was completely absorbed into the song. They really do drag you in, combined with the fantastic soundscape it's mindblowing. They add a very ethereal and upbeat feel to them, for this track you couldn't have done better, the synths and soundscape really do come together in this.
Whilst there is room for improvement, honestly the few scarce downsides (such as the minor one with the drums) couldn't possibly take away from this track. I'm absolutely loving the style and I would love to hear more like this.
If you produce any similar music, then hit me up with a PM because I wanna hear it man.
Nice job, keep it up! 5/5 Stars.
Wow! Probably the best review I've ever gotten :D.
First of all I want to say that it makes me extremely happy that you liked the track so muych :D.
I spent more than 23 hours on this track and used over 50 patterns which breaks all my previous records with a huge margin. Knowing all the work actually payed off is incredible relieving :).
I'll defintly take another look at the opening once more. The first 15 seconds was the part of the song I payed the least amount of attention too so it's been like that from day 1. Also you have a good point with the main riff. Probably wont change it up in this one but i'll certainly keep it in mind in the future :).
I'm pretty amazed that you were able to hear that I used the fl studio default kit in some parts. I've never really thought about a drumkit having "prescence", but I'll look into it. Might be what I'm looking for :D.
For the Japanese theme this wasn't really supposed to be a song influenced by Japanese music but rather a song influenced by Japan itself. I wanted to make a song were people would think about Japan when hearing it so yes It was sort of intentional for it to have a style that most people would associate with Japan and i'm really glad that I managed to do what I was trying to do :D.
This track is actually the first track where i properly try to design the sound. I actually used more time mixing the track than I used making the melody and planning the arrangement so that's why it really gave me and awesome feeling when you said that the soundscape and synths were good :D.
I feel like this track is a huge leap from my previous music and it's cleary the best I've ever made.
Your review will really help me improve myself even more and I think I'll be able to make alot better music thanks to you :).
I'll be sure to hit you up if I make something simillar and thank you so much for the awesome review :D.
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